I've been writing some rap lyrics as Todd suggested to me long ago and I like it. This is just some old stuff

darkness





The scars that you know that I carry,


You know that they run so deep.


As deep as an abyss in the ocean


An ocean of deeply rooted hate.





Trust is a sin, that will rip you in two,


Time is a thing I don't think much about.


Love is the one thing I can't live without.


Your touch is the one thing I know is true.





If I am to suffer all the agony and pain of hell,


I'll have no one to blame, no one but myself.


The only person who really knows who I am,


Everything I thought was right, turned out wrong.





In the evening by the moon's dying light,


The time has come, for your will to be done.


No longer do I care what anyone else may say,


My heart and soul have turned to icy cold stone.





The darkness of complete and total damnation,


You hold my frozen hands in yours.


You will appear whenever the full moon shines,


My virgin queen of the never ending night.

I've been writing some rap lyrics as Todd suggested to me long ago and I like it. This is just some old stuff
well i don't know about rap lyrics, but it sent shivers up my spine, especially the last line...





by the way if anyone ever dogs you because your stuff is so dark, don't pay any attention- poetry is all about feelings coming through with words and trust me ,yours speak loudly and clearly of the pain you have suffered- pain that i can share and be made more whole by reading..





thanks





peace love embracing the darkness
Reply:Wow this is a great poem / lyrics and it;s awesome and would be terrific to some kind of beat...Nice work Shelly
Reply:I really really like it :)
Reply:I think your first two stanzas especially have a really nice rhythm to them. I've always thought rap would a good play for you--I still think that.
Reply:My mouth is touching the floor, OMG!!!!!!!! Is dark, really dark. Proud of you, baby. Best poem ever written.





I love you


Your angel forever
Reply:It was a good suggestion! Your rhyme and meter really work and create a great rhythm in this work. You have strong images in stanza 4 %26amp; 5: develop those! Thanks for sharing!